Knuckles arch, buck and catch the corner of the jawbone, sweeping across osseous matter with a startling, almost blazing kind of precision. The ricochet thunders upwards, pulsating rapiers of shining, immaculate pain that vibrate athwart the mouth’s twenty-eight delicate and varied piano keys, multiplying — nay, amplifying — an oscillating wave of escalated paralysis, a crescendo of searing agony.
The heart seizes.
Held in acute stasis for one elongated, elastic second, along with time itself . . .
. . . Then beats again with the emergence of heavy, pulsating background harmonies which lacerate, then swell in grandeur, scaling the right cheekbone, encapsulating it in a cruel embrace.
In sync, the soft orbs of the eyes shuttle back, forth and upwards — electric baby blues gone interstellar under a chorus of a thousand invisible blows, each at perfect pitch. Upwards, upwards, upwards . . .
Blinding.
White.
Recrudesce.
Leaden limbs drag themselves across worn, coarse-woven carpet towards the mirror. An impossibility presents itself: unblemished skin reflected off guileless glass.
No bruises, no torn lips bleeding copiously, no raw flesh exposed to chill air. The sole indicator of trauma received revealed only by the closest of inspections.
A world of hurt nestled in the confines of the iris.
The letter falls, released from numb, bloodless fingers, and drifts quietly to the threadbare floor.
An eerie haunting description of unwanted news and emotional pain. I hope this is just fiction for you. Be well. Hugs
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‘Tis from past experience, some years ago now, and it shall happen again in the future, though under other guises, for some forms of bad news can never be avoided as a consequence of humans insistence on living and dying, but at present I am not reeling from any terrible blows Scottie, no smiles.
One must take such harsh sharp straw and weave it into a semblance of gold, and in doing so become wordy alchemists as the golden straw shows it’s silvery lining, giving balance to the whole business – some small recompense – nods smiling
Thank you for your description of it Scottie! Welcome words.
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esme, I re-read this multiple times and each reading carried me away with its tightly written and beautifully woven strength: “…unblemished skin reflected off guileless glass” is such a image, it balances delicately upon a shard. Awe inspiring at each reading ❤ ❤
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I’m genuinley honoured by your thoughts on this piece Bill, wordy Cloud girl is almost speechless in fact.
Thank you so much.
“it balances delicately upon a shard” – esme really loves this.
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A blazing kind of precision indeed. When you use this style I must admit I find it disconcerting. It’s so polished and elegant – the refinement is just beyond what most mortals can do.
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Behind all the sticky buns, flashing fairy lights, carwheels and laughter there’s a deadly serious, elegantly refined Empress. People don’t find her quite so much fun as the former, but she’s there all the same, all the time, watching. And sometimes, she steps out, into the dark.
Thank you for this comment, it is truly sublime for me to take in.
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What can I comment? “Oh” followed by the universal adjective came to mind, but I don’t like to type that word, particularly, even if it is completely clear that I mean it as a stronger version of “Wow”.
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Wow is good enough for me though I’ll silently add the words that rhyme with ‘clucking bell’ for impact. Thanking you very kindly Clare for reading and telling me that. Most appreciated. Short and punchy, in the literal sense was the aim, and it seems I’ve had some success there which pleases me greatly. beams
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Wow…that is /powerful/ Esme! Bravo.
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Thank you! bows, catches flowers, curtsies, falls over, waves the flowers in the air, cartwheels, and beams
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-giggles- Don’t hurt yourself!
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Wonderful Esme, my mailbox divulged to me last night a wonderful surprise. It was an envelope and inside was a grand card, which I shared with my family. James, Ron, and I wish to thank you and let you know we are delighted. You are a talented and very kind person. Much love and many hugs from our hearts to yours and Rosie-Roo’s. You both are in our minds and our hearts. Wishing you all the best. Hugs
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I’m so glad! I must apologise to James though as I only realised you had a son when I was watching one of your videos and that was after I’d sent the card! Erk as we say here, but the love was for all your loved ones and yourself of course – beams It’s a genuine pleasure to reach out in 3D to you Scottie, you’ll always have something to remind you of Esme and her Cloud, every year until the Gods and medium sized dogs spirit me away I suspect – laughs. Stay well dear Scottie. ❤
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So much fabulous imagery in here; the piece is dense with it. There was, for me, something enchanting and yet poignant in “electric baby blues gone interstellar”. Really, the piece is sensorially complete — perfect as is, to my mind; like seeing in the background, and as one reads, a claustrophobic video clip of shattering intensity. Well done indeed, Esme!
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Thank you. Thank you, thank you! Outside of the grammar as one gets closer and closer to a piece it’s easy to lose sight of how it affects or might be perceived and received, and I really do appreciate finding out this is what you actually think of it. It needed to drag the reader with it to the mirror. It’s one of the closest gut reactions I’ve ever had that fitted the experience to a tee, and consequently I’m somewhat fond of it. Two tone again. – nods
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Lovely. Piercing. (Burn that letter.)
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Thank you J.B!
One need never burn when one can recreate. – smiles
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I ❤ recreation celebrated with recreation 🙂
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Ha! Cunningly creative combination sir.
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Strong stuff Esme. Well written!
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Thank you Peter, how kind of you to read it and tell me your thoughts – beams and shakes his hand a lot
“Strong stuff” – Aye, not to be taken with mixer, no dilution allowed, down in one so to speak.
I haven’t forgotten about reading and reviewing your book, I’m just up to my ears and antenna with outside forces. Bear with.
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A complex, well penned description of the exquisite nature of pain. It’s a wonder, is it not, that we can move through it to the other side. Love the last line, and hope it doesn’t visit you again – at least for a very long time. Love to you, dear one. ❤
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Many thanks dear, it’s enormously kind of you to say so, and yes, we always move onwards, it’s how we carry the accouterments that makes the difference to the rest of the journey methinks.
“the exquisite nature of pain” – Isn’t it. Thank you for kind wishes too, it’s all down to time as much as anything, but when surrounded by such love as yours the blast will always be slightly more cushioned that it would without ❤ X
Love the profile pic Bela!
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“Jollier than the piece belies.” Though the piece was very good – and part and parcel of being human, to one degree or another. Not something to hide just because people want to typecast you or because their fears are piqued. If so, it’s needed or it wouldn’t be happening. Love ❤
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It’s never crossed my mind to hold back any writing in case of being pigeon-holed (so to speak), I let everything out as it appears and it’s tough luck if I do, because if someone wants to read me they will, if they bored they drift as is natural. I just meant I’m not in that place at present that’s all, not that I’m a jollier person than someone who writes that would be, if you get me? I respect and take in the empathy offered for the past, and will welcome any future necessities, but the here and now needn’t conjure concern. – nods and smiles at her. ❤
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I did understand more than my hurried words imparted – sorry if any misconstrue. Glad here and now you’re here. And now. And writing your thoughts down. Good stuff, that ❤
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No fear, dear Bela, nor apologies needed, Esme is overly pedantic at times, almost everything is her muse’s fault though, which is both useful and baited breath filling. ❤ smiles and weakly hugs
– Esme Cloud x
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❤ ❤ ❤
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As always brilliantly crafted. It always, it takes me a little time to know what to say, as otherwise I’d just say “wow” all the time. Which admittedly would take less time on your part to respond to. lol
I was thinking that what makes a good writer is not just one’s vocabulary and grammar skills, but also one’s ability to observe carefully. It’s clear that you’ve experienced this moment before, but few could really move through it in such detail. Being able to verbalize sensations that happen for most people unconsciously and all in a moment is true skill of a writer. Some may notice these things and not have half the skill to articulate, others may be great at articulating but never really look at the world. You can do both so excellently. And it’s what allows the reader to feel it too. The emotional response is palpable whenever I read your work.
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I always wait until I have the energy/capability to reply fully to comments before posting them, however time is ticking on and I’m still wading here, so post I shall, and simply say it’s an incredible comment for me to read as a reaction to my penning — heartwarming and it spurs me on too. Thank you Swarn for your continuous support, you say it as you see it and that’s wonderful. ❤
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No worries. You don’t need to put lots of effort into your comments, because you’ve put the effort into the writing that we all get to enjoy. ❤
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